Pretty Sentence

In revision, I came across a pretty sentence that unfortunately alliterates. I love the imagery of this sentence:

Black smoke from its stacks stained the cerulean sky.

This isn’t a poem, so alliteration–especially accidental–isn’t a good idea. I really wanted to keep that imagery. Here’s how I revised it:

Black smoke from its chimneys stained the azure sky.

Not quite as pretty, but hopefully it still works.

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