Okay, I give up. I’ve been trying to accept gracefully the criticism I received at the conference, but I’m about to cry. Ser-i-ous-ly.
The word was that there was too much description, the opening (read “forbidden prologue”) waaaaaaaaaay slowed the story down and the two characters in it had nothing to offer. Stay in close third POV and change the world to be more obviously different from ours–why don’t they talk different?
::::in tears::: I worked so hard to add in all that description because it doesn’t come naturally for me, aren’t fantasies supposed to open with random characters that set the scene and describe the conflict? I don’t want to tell the story in close third I want more control than that because the story is about a world not just a person, I threw in typewriters and ancient computers out the wazoo and do you have any idea how hard it is to keep their diction consistently of that world????????
I’m not upset with the people who critique me; I’m upset with how hard revision consistently is. The frustrating part is sorting out what is personal taste/current trend and what is actually solid craft advice. Can’t I please throw this out the window yet???
P.S. And then, I read How to Write Science Fiction and Fantasy by Orson Scott Card, and I felt better.